I can see why this portfolio was such a low grade. The author's texts lack organization and flow. He introduces a point, barely touches on it and then moves on to the next point. If he were truly to go into any detail about his thoughts, each paragraph would increase in length exponentially. Also, he has a large amount of convention errors as well as lacking show large changes in different parts of the writing process. His essays still have a lot of potential and work to be done on them to bring them to any kind of higher grade level.
I feel bad because it sounds like he tried hard, and was aware of the fact that he wasn't necessarily the best writer but I can see how this paper fits the grade because his thoughts are incomplete at times and his paragraphs are very choppy. His writing lacks flow and excitment. It is hard to connect to anything in the writing because it is hard to follow and choppy.
Although there is no real requirement for how long your paragraph has to be, his paragraphs are all very short. This is not necessarily always bad but it makes it hard to read his paper continuously.
I can see how he got a low grade becuase it is obvioius that he still has a lot of wort to do to perfect his writing skills.
I can easily see why this portfolio received the grade of a D+. The author did not meet most of the criteria. His writing did not flow, the paragraphs were short, and the ideas were incomplete. He did not meet any of the knowledge of conventions criteria. There was several spelling and grammar errors throughout the portfolio. He also lacked critical thinking. When he presented an idea it was difficult to see his position, and why he chose this as his position. He lacked the information to back up his ideas. This portfolio still has a lot of work to be done.
I see why this portfolio received a D+ because it seemed like the author tried to address what they were supposed to but did not quite get how to convey the messages and the flow and transitions of the paper were not there at all. The words and the paragraphs did not flow and were not organized. They also as one of the comments states that they did not quite understand the prompts nor answered them accurately.
This paper I think deserves the grade it recieved. He uses very short sentences which make it seem like his ideas are imcomplete and that it makes his paper very choppy and lack flow. I feel like this student did not learn very much in class because the formating of the paper is very bad which I didnt see much of in the other papers. His in text citation is very wrong and somtimes none existed which makes you wonder if he was making his paper up or if he actually did reaserch. His portfolio is significatly shorter then all the others and I think this paper deserves the D+ grade it got.
There is a substantial amount of evidence as to why the writer received a D+ on this portfolio. First and foremost, the writer had a number of grammatical errors within each of the essays. Although the writer talked a lot in his/her final paper about peer-editing and self-editing and the importance of this, it was evident that the writer lacked in this area with every paper, including the final paper. There was also a lack of organization within his/her papers and didn't show much understanding toward what the thesis statements had stated and went off-topic. I don't believe the writer learned much from the class, and although he/she disagrees and states otherwise in the final paper, there is proof of it throughout this final essay and the entire portfolio itself.
I do, however, credit him/her in asking how to better his/her writing and what were the weaknesses and strengths.
I think the biggest thing this author lacks is knowing how to organize his/her work in an effective way that makes the reading easy to follow. Though there are many mistakes in the author's work, I think they made improvements between drafts and did display that they are learning how to better his/her work. The author continues making mistakes between drafts though, which is why I think he/she received such a low grade. I personally believe they should not have received as low of a grade as they did, because the amount of work put into this portfolio I believe is worth more than a D+.
In my opinion this paper received such a low grade for a number of reasons. First of all the writing style seems very spotty, information definitely exists throughout the paper but there is a lack of structure and flow in the way that it is written. It seems as if the writer did not know enough about the subject to be writing a paper on it which resulted in a good amount of "fluff." They did make improvements between the course of their drafts but the end result is still not what you would be looking for in a research paper nonetheless.
To start off with, the writer did not reflect on their own progress or awareness of the process needed to create an excellent paper. There were a lot of contractions and also grammatical errors within the writings that it was obvious the writer did not take their time in editing or revising their papers. There were not any titles on the papers, let alone original therefore it was difficult to understand what the papers were really about. If not obvious, the writer did not satisfy the requirements of the assignments given because the papers were not easy to understand and also seemed like the writer just did a fast job on them. There was only at most two sources for each paper and neither were properly cited so overall this portfolio did not demonstrate any sort of improvement for the writer and therefore deserved the grade, maybe even lower.
Starting off the writer addresses how they thought they improved in the course, but reading the paper, it didnt seem as if any of those changes were made. The writer seemed as if they didnt really make an effort and just sort of put random thoughts together. The papers were dull and lacked a certain flair. The paragraphs were super short and the writer didnt seem to go in depth on each of the areas. The writer is very unorganized with his/her thoughts and the paper had no flow to it. It was pretty confusing to read. The writer just rushed through the papers. It was a well deserved D+ paper.
This paper is obviously a D paper. It doesn't meet the page requirement and the whole essay is a summary. The citation is not the kind of citation it needs to be. There is no argument in the paper. It is all around just a really long summary of a paper the writer read.
Clearly D work. Agree with above, if the author doesn't even make page requirements how can he/she expect a fine grade. Sentences were choppy and the point that were trying to be portrayed were confusing.
This portfolio was given a D+ grade which I agree with. The writer had a lot of grammatical errors and showed poor thoughts and ideas. The paragraphs were short and no there were no details about the ideas presented. I think more sources could have helped this writer expand more and get more useful information into his essay. It seems like the writer did not re-read his essay which is why there are so many sentences that don't fully make sense. The writer wrote these papers as fast as possible which is why they did poorly on the portfolio and got a D+.
The author of this paper clearly deserved a D+ because the sentence structure does not flow and they lacked the use of punctuation. I also noticed that they did not use past or present tense on the word "help" in the first paragraph where it should have been used.
Even skimming through this portfolio, you could tell it was more of an D effort and looked as the writer didn't put enough time into It as well. They didn't proof read there work so you can point out where all the spelling and grammar errors are. The whole thing didn't flow well as a whole and there was a huge lack of organization. They obviously did not read through the rubric and check over to see If they included everything and what not. He bluntly did not meet the excepted criteria of what he was supposed to do.
The portfolio falls short on many instances. It fails to meet the requirements, it lacks proper writing conventions and it is hard to follow. The writer lacked proper technique for putting his/her ideas together and the result was a mixed jumble of ideas with hard-to-make connections.
There are many grammatical errors in all of the included papers; incorrect syntax, poor diction, usage of phrases and dependent clauses as stand alone sentences, etc. All of that aside though, there are several areas of the rubric that were seemingly ignored. The conventions were poor, notably the citations and the mechanics. There did not appear to be much improvement in the writing in the succession of drafts and there seemed to be almost no proofreading done. There needed to be more critical thinking and elaboration done in all of the included papers as well.
In this portfolio the author had poor sentence structure and not enough support to his thesis and his ideas. quite a bit more errors grammatically and the flow was hard to follow. this author definitely needed someone or multiple people to edit and proof read his papers before handing them in. i chose to read over the A,B, C-, and D papers to get an idea of the difference of what and how the portfolio's would be graded and the difference of these were great and perfect help for me for my own final portfolio.
This portfolio received the grade that it got, D plus, because lack of organization, poor use of conventions and grammar and not a clear understanding of what was asked of him. First of all the research paper included no title which I think is really important in an essay. The research paper was written poorly, you could see that that person tried to write, but did not really show a clear understanding of it. The research paper stated too many facts, but did not really present evidence and support its argument. The organization of the portfolio needed some work, because it did not flow. One of the major things why this portfolio did not meet the portfolio rubric was because it did not show progression of writing. There was little changes from the first drafts that were presented.
This paper was horrible in that the overall flow and organization of it was completely thrown off. It could have gone better if their had been more thinking that had gone into the paper. The conventions and grammar were not what is expected from average students. The paper has little understanding of subject matter, and makes it almost impossible for the reader to follow, thus making it impossible to establish any kind of pathos other than that of a horribly crafted paper. All sense of writing had not been employed, little had been done right, and the writer failed to make any progress to fit the rubric.
This paper is D+ because it doesn’t really fallow the rubric. The sentence structure doesn’t flow through and his thought weren’t really structured because it was hard to fallow what he was trying to say. He had a lot of bad grammar and there isn’t any argument showing. The author also shows poor conventions in his writing.
Improvement on the first paper can be seen, but overall, it remained riddled with grammatical errors, improper MLA citation, and poor flow. In fact, in the first draft the writer failed to give a coherent thesis. The writer's research paper is a definite step up, but I'd be lying if I said that it didn't leave the reader wanting. The concluding sentence also appears to be at odds with itself: "Muscle enhancers have not been proven to be unsafe but can be dangerous if not used properly." Overall, the writer definitely showed improvement, but there is no doubt that the portfolio is still lacking. I think that it is fair to say that a D+ was--in this case--almost a generous grade.
I can see why this author received a D+ and i hate saying that. but his writing was not to clear, it seemed choppy and did not flow to well. he never seemed to say on topic. there was several grammatical errors in his paper. i did see an improvement in his writing though. it was a D+ paper.
This is truly an example of a poorly written paper. I believe that the author either rushed at the last minute or truly didn't care. The first bit is an absolute disaster; after two attempts I gave up on trying to decide what he was saying. The third essay, which I believe is the third draft, is not so bad. A lot of the repetition of the first is cleaned up and most grammatical mistakes seemed to have been fixed. A lot of the other commenters seem to be calling the author out on thesis statements, but having been taught writing in a system that regards thesis statements as optional, can not fault him for leaving them out. The third draft is the only real highlight of the portfolio, while he shows some improvement, he continues to make organizational errors and often goes off-topic.
The grade given for this paper was well deserved. The paragraphs were chunky and did not flow well to each other. The thesis did not give a clear purpose for the paper. There were grammer errors and non-logical sentences.
This paper seems focused by its idea of staying on the topic what happened their writing for English class, but is a random assortment of ideas. It bounces from one idea to another as if the person were talking to their friend. There is no thesis in the paper and no focus from the thesis. There is no analyzed parts just what he/she did. It is a lot of what I did and not a lot of why they did that or the importance of doing it that way. With no focus in the paper, I believe this paper did deserve a D.
This paper made the C- paper look like B or B+ material. His sentences are scatter-brained with little supportive evidence as to what he learned in ENGL 101, as proof by his many two or three sentence paragraphs, and lack of punctuation and spelling. Not to mention that he did not even underline, or try to give the author of the article he read credit. In addition, some of the comments say that they think his biggest problem was that he did not understand the material that was put forth in the article he tried galiantly to read and dig out the concepts. Finally, his introduction was weak, and his vocabulary was mighty poor.
It was difficult to figure out what the writer was trying to deliver to the reader. The transition between paragraphs were weak. Although the writer attempted to tell the reader what he had learned in his English class, he/she was jumping from one idea to another in a very disorganized fashion. The final draft did show improvements from the previous two papers but overall the paper was poorly organized.
This portfolio got the grade it deserved. It did not meet the expectations. The organization of the paper was weak, it was also not put well together, the sentences were not good. When the author raised a point they did not qualify it with anything afterwards. I can easily see why it got the grade it did, it was written poorly, did not flow, and the organization was terrible
I agree with this paper receiving a D+ grade, mainly for the shaky flow and structure of the paper. It has a few grammatical errors and did not cite properly. the paper had some ideas but never really went into depth on much of the ideas. Another reason for this poor grade is because there is really no improvement across the forming and drafting of the portfolio.
This paper definitely earned a D+ grade. The writer failed to do any critical thinking. The paper was a summary and did not display any evidence of the use of rhetoric. The paper was very brief and completely missed the fundamental aspect of academic writing.
I can see why this portfolio was such a low grade. The author's texts lack organization and flow. He introduces a point, barely touches on it and then moves on to the next point. If he were truly to go into any detail about his thoughts, each paragraph would increase in length exponentially. Also, he has a large amount of convention errors as well as lacking show large changes in different parts of the writing process. His essays still have a lot of potential and work to be done on them to bring them to any kind of higher grade level.
ReplyDeleteI feel bad because it sounds like he tried hard, and was aware of the fact that he wasn't necessarily the best writer but I can see how this paper fits the grade because his thoughts are incomplete at times and his paragraphs are very choppy. His writing lacks flow and excitment. It is hard to connect to anything in the writing because it is hard to follow and choppy.
ReplyDeleteAlthough there is no real requirement for how long your paragraph has to be, his paragraphs are all very short. This is not necessarily always bad but it makes it hard to read his paper continuously.
I can see how he got a low grade becuase it is obvioius that he still has a lot of wort to do to perfect his writing skills.
I can easily see why this portfolio received the grade of a D+. The author did not meet most of the criteria. His writing did not flow, the paragraphs were short, and the ideas were incomplete. He did not meet any of the knowledge of conventions criteria. There was several spelling and grammar errors throughout the portfolio. He also lacked critical thinking. When he presented an idea it was difficult to see his position, and why he chose this as his position. He lacked the information to back up his ideas. This portfolio still has a lot of work to be done.
ReplyDeleteI see why this portfolio received a D+ because it seemed like the author tried to address what they were supposed to but did not quite get how to convey the messages and the flow and transitions of the paper were not there at all. The words and the paragraphs did not flow and were not organized. They also as one of the comments states that they did not quite understand the prompts nor answered them accurately.
ReplyDeleteThis paper I think deserves the grade it recieved. He uses very short sentences which make it seem like his ideas are imcomplete and that it makes his paper very choppy and lack flow. I feel like this student did not learn very much in class because the formating of the paper is very bad which I didnt see much of in the other papers. His in text citation is very wrong and somtimes none existed which makes you wonder if he was making his paper up or if he actually did reaserch. His portfolio is significatly shorter then all the others and I think this paper deserves the D+ grade it got.
ReplyDeleteThere is a substantial amount of evidence as to why the writer received a D+ on this portfolio. First and foremost, the writer had a number of grammatical errors within each of the essays. Although the writer talked a lot in his/her final paper about peer-editing and self-editing and the importance of this, it was evident that the writer lacked in this area with every paper, including the final paper. There was also a lack of organization within his/her papers and didn't show much understanding toward what the thesis statements had stated and went off-topic. I don't believe the writer learned much from the class, and although he/she disagrees and states otherwise in the final paper, there is proof of it throughout this final essay and the entire portfolio itself.
ReplyDeleteI do, however, credit him/her in asking how to better his/her writing and what were the weaknesses and strengths.
I think the biggest thing this author lacks is knowing how to organize his/her work in an effective way that makes the reading easy to follow. Though there are many mistakes in the author's work, I think they made improvements between drafts and did display that they are learning how to better his/her work. The author continues making mistakes between drafts though, which is why I think he/she received such a low grade. I personally believe they should not have received as low of a grade as they did, because the amount of work put into this portfolio I believe is worth more than a D+.
ReplyDeleteIn my opinion this paper received such a low grade for a number of reasons. First of all the writing style seems very spotty, information definitely exists throughout the paper but there is a lack of structure and flow in the way that it is written. It seems as if the writer did not know enough about the subject to be writing a paper on it which resulted in a good amount of "fluff." They did make improvements between the course of their drafts but the end result is still not what you would be looking for in a research paper nonetheless.
ReplyDeleteTo start off with, the writer did not reflect on their own progress or awareness of the process needed to create an excellent paper. There were a lot of contractions and also grammatical errors within the writings that it was obvious the writer did not take their time in editing or revising their papers. There were not any titles on the papers, let alone original therefore it was difficult to understand what the papers were really about. If not obvious, the writer did not satisfy the requirements of the assignments given because the papers were not easy to understand and also seemed like the writer just did a fast job on them. There was only at most two sources for each paper and neither were properly cited so overall this portfolio did not demonstrate any sort of improvement for the writer and therefore deserved the grade, maybe even lower.
ReplyDeleteStarting off the writer addresses how they thought they improved in the course, but reading the paper, it didnt seem as if any of those changes were made. The writer seemed as if they didnt really make an effort and just sort of put random thoughts together.
ReplyDeleteThe papers were dull and lacked a certain flair. The paragraphs were super short and the writer didnt seem to go in depth on each of the areas. The writer is very unorganized with his/her thoughts and the paper had no flow to it. It was pretty confusing to read. The writer just rushed through the papers. It was a well deserved D+ paper.
This paper is obviously a D paper. It doesn't meet the page requirement and the whole essay is a summary. The citation is not the kind of citation it needs to be. There is no argument in the paper. It is all around just a really long summary of a paper the writer read.
ReplyDeleteClearly D work. Agree with above, if the author doesn't even make page requirements how can he/she expect a fine grade. Sentences were choppy and the point that were trying to be portrayed were confusing.
ReplyDeleteThis portfolio was given a D+ grade which I agree with. The writer had a lot of grammatical errors and showed poor thoughts and ideas. The paragraphs were short and no there were no details about the ideas presented. I think more sources could have helped this writer expand more and get more useful information into his essay. It seems like the writer did not re-read his essay which is why there are so many sentences that don't fully make sense. The writer wrote these papers as fast as possible which is why they did poorly on the portfolio and got a D+.
ReplyDeleteThe author of this paper clearly deserved a D+ because the sentence structure does not flow and they lacked the use of punctuation. I also noticed that they did not use past or present tense on the word "help" in the first paragraph where it should have been used.
ReplyDeleteEven skimming through this portfolio, you could tell it was more of an D effort and looked as the writer didn't put enough time into It as well. They didn't proof read there work so you can point out where all the spelling and grammar errors are. The whole thing didn't flow well as a whole and there was a huge lack of organization. They obviously did not read through the rubric and check over to see If they included everything and what not. He bluntly did not meet the excepted criteria of what he was supposed to do.
ReplyDeleteThe portfolio falls short on many instances. It fails to meet the requirements, it lacks proper writing conventions and it is hard to follow. The writer lacked proper technique for putting his/her ideas together and the result was a mixed jumble of ideas with hard-to-make connections.
ReplyDeleteThere are many grammatical errors in all of the included papers; incorrect syntax, poor diction, usage of phrases and dependent clauses as stand alone sentences, etc. All of that aside though, there are several areas of the rubric that were seemingly ignored. The conventions were poor, notably the citations and the mechanics. There did not appear to be much improvement in the writing in the succession of drafts and there seemed to be almost no proofreading done. There needed to be more critical thinking and elaboration done in all of the included papers as well.
ReplyDeleteIn this portfolio the author had poor sentence structure and not enough support to his thesis and his ideas. quite a bit more errors grammatically and the flow was hard to follow. this author definitely needed someone or multiple people to edit and proof read his papers before handing them in. i chose to read over the A,B, C-, and D papers to get an idea of the difference of what and how the portfolio's would be graded and the difference of these were great and perfect help for me for my own final portfolio.
ReplyDeleteThis portfolio received the grade that it got, D plus, because lack of organization, poor use of conventions and grammar and not a clear understanding of what was asked of him. First of all the research paper included no title which I think is really important in an essay. The research paper was written poorly, you could see that that person tried to write, but did not really show a clear understanding of it. The research paper stated too many facts, but did not really present evidence and support its argument. The organization of the portfolio needed some work, because it did not flow. One of the major things why this portfolio did not meet the portfolio rubric was because it did not show progression of writing. There was little changes from the first drafts that were presented.
ReplyDeleteThis paper was horrible in that the overall flow and organization of it was completely thrown off. It could have gone better if their had been more thinking that had gone into the paper. The conventions and grammar were not what is expected from average students. The paper has little understanding of subject matter, and makes it almost impossible for the reader to follow, thus making it impossible to establish any kind of pathos other than that of a horribly crafted paper. All sense of writing had not been employed, little had been done right, and the writer failed to make any progress to fit the rubric.
ReplyDeleteThis paper is D+ because it doesn’t really fallow the rubric. The sentence structure doesn’t flow through and his thought weren’t really structured because it was hard to fallow what he was trying to say. He had a lot of bad grammar and there isn’t any argument showing. The author also shows poor conventions in his writing.
ReplyDeleteImprovement on the first paper can be seen, but overall, it remained riddled with grammatical errors, improper MLA citation, and poor flow. In fact, in the first draft the writer failed to give a coherent thesis. The writer's research paper is a definite step up, but I'd be lying if I said that it didn't leave the reader wanting. The concluding sentence also appears to be at odds with itself: "Muscle enhancers have not been proven to be unsafe but can be dangerous if not used properly." Overall, the writer definitely showed improvement, but there is no doubt that the portfolio is still lacking. I think that it is fair to say that a D+ was--in this case--almost a generous grade.
ReplyDeleteI can see why this author received a D+ and i hate saying that. but his writing was not to clear, it seemed choppy and did not flow to well. he never seemed to say on topic. there was several grammatical errors in his paper. i did see an improvement in his writing though. it was a D+ paper.
ReplyDeleteThis is truly an example of a poorly written paper. I believe that the author either rushed at the last minute or truly didn't care. The first bit is an absolute disaster; after two attempts I gave up on trying to decide what he was saying. The third essay, which I believe is the third draft, is not so bad. A lot of the repetition of the first is cleaned up and most grammatical mistakes seemed to have been fixed. A lot of the other commenters seem to be calling the author out on thesis statements, but having been taught writing in a system that regards thesis statements as optional, can not fault him for leaving them out. The third draft is the only real highlight of the portfolio, while he shows some improvement, he continues to make organizational errors and often goes off-topic.
ReplyDeleteThe grade given for this paper was well deserved. The paragraphs were chunky and did not flow well to each other. The thesis did not give a clear purpose for the paper. There were grammer errors and non-logical sentences.
ReplyDeleteThis paper seems focused by its idea of staying on the topic what happened their writing for English class, but is a random assortment of ideas. It bounces from one idea to another as if the person were talking to their friend. There is no thesis in the paper and no focus from the thesis. There is no analyzed parts just what he/she did. It is a lot of what I did and not a lot of why they did that or the importance of doing it that way. With no focus in the paper, I believe this paper did deserve a D.
ReplyDeleteThis paper made the C- paper look like B or B+ material. His sentences are scatter-brained with little supportive evidence as to what he learned in ENGL 101, as proof by his many two or three sentence paragraphs, and lack of punctuation and spelling. Not to mention that he did not even underline, or try to give the author of the article he read credit. In addition, some of the comments say that they think his biggest problem was that he did not understand the material that was put forth in the article he tried galiantly to read and dig out the concepts. Finally, his introduction was weak, and his vocabulary was mighty poor.
ReplyDeleteIt was difficult to figure out what the writer was trying to deliver to the reader. The transition between paragraphs were weak. Although the writer attempted to tell the reader what he had learned in his English class, he/she was jumping from one idea to another in a very disorganized fashion. The final draft did show improvements from the previous two papers but overall the paper was poorly organized.
ReplyDeleteThis portfolio got the grade it deserved. It did not meet the expectations. The organization of the paper was weak, it was also not put well together, the sentences were not good. When the author raised a point they did not qualify it with anything afterwards. I can easily see why it got the grade it did, it was written poorly, did not flow, and the organization was terrible
ReplyDeleteI agree with this paper receiving a D+ grade, mainly for the shaky flow and structure of the paper. It has a few grammatical errors and did not cite properly. the paper had some ideas but never really went into depth on much of the ideas. Another reason for this poor grade is because there is really no improvement across the forming and drafting of the portfolio.
ReplyDeleteThis paper definitely earned a D+ grade. The writer failed to do any critical thinking. The paper was a summary and did not display any evidence of the use of rhetoric. The paper was very brief and completely missed the fundamental aspect of academic writing.
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