I am not entirely certain why this portfolio did not get a higher grade than it did. In my opinion, this research paper was better written and in a more mature voice than that of the B plus portfolio. There was much less extra drafts, so there was not as much work shown, so I suppose they may have lost their points in the writing process category. You can not see how much the author extended their thinking from one draft to another, but to me they did very well in the other categories and should have deserved a higher grade, in comparison to the higher graded papers.
I agree with EkHorne, that this paper should have received a better grade.The reflection was well thought out and detailed. The writer gave specific examples from her writing, quoted them or pointed out where in the paper the reader could find an example.In the autobiography there were references to national events that gave more insight about the writer and made it easier for the reader to relate.The research paper was well researched and the writer's interest level in the topic is apparent. For each point that the writer made there were quotes and facts to back it up. My only issue was that the focus of the paper could have been more clearly stated in the intro. It's not just about eating disorders but it's affect on young women especially.
This paper received a B- but I feel, like others it deserved a higher grade. The author had good rhetorical awareness. She focused on a point, and used the correct tone to address her audience. Her critical thinking as well was strong. She identified her problem, (in one paper it was eating disorders) and was able to write about her specific position on the problem through sources and elaboration of personal experiences and world events. She also had good information literacy and was able to evaluate several different sources into a cohesive paper. This paper may have been docked down because unlike others, she did have fewer drafts. Her processes of writing were not clearly seen. One draft to another changed drastically without much editing seen. I think this portfolio deserved a B instead of a B-.
I also think that this paper needed to receive a higher grade. While reading through it, it seemed to me that the ideas were well conveyed throughout the organization of the paper and also, she used a lot of evidence to convey her ideas accurately. i think that she accurately selected an idea to base her research off of and gave good evidence to support it in a paper that actually flowed well. She did only have one draft beforehand and that may possibly have knocked her down a little bit but i don't think it shouldve been a b-. I think an a- wouldve served this paper better.
Not to sound redundant, but I too agree with the above posters that this should have gotten a much better grade than the B+ papers. I thought the fact that there was less obvious revising and fewer drafts indicated the writers writing skill and proficiency. The author's use of rhetorical analysis was strong and confident, it was clear that they understood the concept and applied it to something they knew a lot about. The fact that the writer always provided resources and quotes to illustrate her arguments more thoroughly gave the impression that they were serious students who tried very hard to do well on this project.
I would agree with the posts above. I would be disappointed with a B- as a grade and I do not believe that is a good grade to receive. The work done in this portfolio is scholarly and the author shows improvement as a writer. In the cover letter, the author identifies what she needed to do to make improvements in her writing. Her research paper is very well written and utilizes the support provided very effectively. I would give this portfolio a B+ if not an A-.
I felt that this paper should have gotten about an A-. Not only did the writer reflect on their own progress in writing but also developed strategies for editing and revising. The writer did not mention their own awareness of the writing process in the reflection but did demonstrate it throughout the portfolio. The spacing on works cited was awkward but did cite through out the whole entire essay written. Lastly the writer was able to fully support their positions using adequate info. Overall I believe this porfolio deserved a higher grade than what was actually given.
I can understand why the grade given was a B- although I think it may have been better. The conventions were good, and the writing was clear, but it sounded like the type of paper that might be more appropriate for high school. There were correct citations and lots of good sources to support her ideas. I found the writing to be organized well and actually seemed interesting. I probably would have given the paper a B+ or A-.
If I would have composed this portfolio I would have been a little upset that I was given a B-. All information was clearly presented and conventions were pretty close to perfect. I don't understand how this portfolio is much different, grade wise, to the B+ portfolio.
In agreement with almost every post above, I beliueve that this portfolio deserves a higher grade than a B-. I feel as though the author flowed the rubric to a decent extent. in addition, the conventions and rhetorical awareness were worthy of a higher grade. On the other hand, I can see where the author would lose a large portion of points, the processes of writing. Its true that they did not have as many drafts prior to the final piece. However, I believe they made adequate revisions, and can see why they felt as though they had a solid final copy. If I was this person, I would be mildly upset with the grade received.
The flow of the paper went well, and understanding was conveyed fairly well. The Rhetoric present was well articulated, and made a good connection with the audience and pathos. The writer demonstrated critical thinking and mad valid points that may have had a higher grade if graded by a different teacher, though it is clear why this paper is in the B range, for its ability to stay mildly close with the rubric.
im also surprised that this paper was a B- paper, to me it sounded better then the B+ paper. this author did a good job with organization and was scholarly in his writing. the paper flowed well the and improvement was proven through the writing. i am surprised by the grade. it followed directions well and stuck to the main points and provided good support. there is a clear voice in the papers which make it more interesting to read. i believe this portfolio should have received a better grade more like B+ work.
I think the paper should have gotten an A. She went well into depth for her topic. Her research paper flowed so easy. She would often ask questions to the reader which made it feel more interactive. The only problem I saw were possible run on sentences. But this was not enough to get any grade less than an A- in my opinion.
In my opinion I believe the paper should have gotten at least a B+, however, I can see where this writer may have lost points. For example, the first thing I noticed is that on his first page there wasn't even a title or a clue as to what I was reading. Perhaps he had a title page or the Portfolio is mixed up in the file, but either way he should throw his title up in the top write with a page number so people know what they are reading incase mixups do happen. However, I did think his ENGL 101 appreciation paper and Autobiography were very well written and in a very bold and scholastic voice. Not sure if he was suppossed to use more in-class english words, but I believe he established his ethos in his his autobiography. Finally, his papers followed a concise format, with little fillers, and a lot of good material.
This was a solid paper, and while it received a grade of a B-, after looking through the B+ portfolio I think that it should have gotten a slightly better grade. Personally I felt the research paper was even more in depth than that of the B+ one. All the papers were well written, and I could possibly could missing some major mistakes that could've dropped it to a B- grade, but overall I thought it deserved better.
This paper was well constructed and to my understanding, hit the key points that were being asked. Like above, I also think this person should have received a better grade than what was given. If I were to grade it, the writer would have recieved an A-. The paper flowed nicely and I(as the reader) understood what was being talked about. The writer also improved their final draft and put effort into making this a well written paper. Good material was present and this person deserved at least an A-.
I am not entirely certain why this portfolio did not get a higher grade than it did. In my opinion, this research paper was better written and in a more mature voice than that of the B plus portfolio. There was much less extra drafts, so there was not as much work shown, so I suppose they may have lost their points in the writing process category. You can not see how much the author extended their thinking from one draft to another, but to me they did very well in the other categories and should have deserved a higher grade, in comparison to the higher graded papers.
ReplyDeleteI agree with EkHorne, that this paper should have received a better grade.The reflection was well thought out and detailed. The writer gave specific examples from her writing, quoted them or pointed out where in the paper the reader could find an example.In the autobiography there were references to national events that gave more insight about the writer and made it easier for the reader to relate.The research paper was well researched and the writer's interest level in the topic is apparent. For each point that the writer made there were quotes and facts to back it up. My only issue was that the focus of the paper could have been more clearly stated in the intro. It's not just about eating disorders but it's affect on young women especially.
ReplyDeleteThis paper received a B- but I feel, like others it deserved a higher grade. The author had good rhetorical awareness. She focused on a point, and used the correct tone to address her audience. Her critical thinking as well was strong. She identified her problem, (in one paper it was eating disorders) and was able to write about her specific position on the problem through sources and elaboration of personal experiences and world events. She also had good information literacy and was able to evaluate several different sources into a cohesive paper. This paper may have been docked down because unlike others, she did have fewer drafts. Her processes of writing were not clearly seen. One draft to another changed drastically without much editing seen. I think this portfolio deserved a B instead of a B-.
ReplyDeleteI also think that this paper needed to receive a higher grade. While reading through it, it seemed to me that the ideas were well conveyed throughout the organization of the paper and also, she used a lot of evidence to convey her ideas accurately. i think that she accurately selected an idea to base her research off of and gave good evidence to support it in a paper that actually flowed well. She did only have one draft beforehand and that may possibly have knocked her down a little bit but i don't think it shouldve been a b-. I think an a- wouldve served this paper better.
ReplyDeleteNot to sound redundant, but I too agree with the above posters that this should have gotten a much better grade than the B+ papers. I thought the fact that there was less obvious revising and fewer drafts indicated the writers writing skill and proficiency. The author's use of rhetorical analysis was strong and confident, it was clear that they understood the concept and applied it to something they knew a lot about. The fact that the writer always provided resources and quotes to illustrate her arguments more thoroughly gave the impression that they were serious students who tried very hard to do well on this project.
ReplyDeleteI would agree with the posts above. I would be disappointed with a B- as a grade and I do not believe that is a good grade to receive. The work done in this portfolio is scholarly and the author shows improvement as a writer. In the cover letter, the author identifies what she needed to do to make improvements in her writing. Her research paper is very well written and utilizes the support provided very effectively. I would give this portfolio a B+ if not an A-.
ReplyDeleteI felt that this paper should have gotten about an A-. Not only did the writer reflect on their own progress in writing but also developed strategies for editing and revising. The writer did not mention their own awareness of the writing process in the reflection but did demonstrate it throughout the portfolio. The spacing on works cited was awkward but did cite through out the whole entire essay written. Lastly the writer was able to fully support their positions using adequate info. Overall I believe this porfolio deserved a higher grade than what was actually given.
ReplyDeleteI can understand why the grade given was a B- although I think it may have been better. The conventions were good, and the writing was clear, but it sounded like the type of paper that might be more appropriate for high school. There were correct citations and lots of good sources to support her ideas. I found the writing to be organized well and actually seemed interesting. I probably would have given the paper a B+ or A-.
ReplyDeleteIf I would have composed this portfolio I would have been a little upset that I was given a B-. All information was clearly presented and conventions were pretty close to perfect. I don't understand how this portfolio is much different, grade wise, to the B+ portfolio.
ReplyDeleteIn agreement with almost every post above, I beliueve that this portfolio deserves a higher grade than a B-. I feel as though the author flowed the rubric to a decent extent. in addition, the conventions and rhetorical awareness were worthy of a higher grade. On the other hand, I can see where the author would lose a large portion of points, the processes of writing. Its true that they did not have as many drafts prior to the final piece. However, I believe they made adequate revisions, and can see why they felt as though they had a solid final copy. If I was this person, I would be mildly upset with the grade received.
ReplyDeleteThe flow of the paper went well, and understanding was conveyed fairly well. The Rhetoric present was well articulated, and made a good connection with the audience and pathos. The writer demonstrated critical thinking and mad valid points that may have had a higher grade if graded by a different teacher, though it is clear why this paper is in the B range, for its ability to stay mildly close with the rubric.
ReplyDeleteim also surprised that this paper was a B- paper, to me it sounded better then the B+ paper. this author did a good job with organization and was scholarly in his writing. the paper flowed well the and improvement was proven through the writing. i am surprised by the grade. it followed directions well and stuck to the main points and provided good support. there is a clear voice in the papers which make it more interesting to read. i believe this portfolio should have received a better grade more like B+ work.
ReplyDeleteI think the paper should have gotten an A. She went well into depth for her topic. Her research paper flowed so easy. She would often ask questions to the reader which made it feel more interactive. The only problem I saw were possible run on sentences. But this was not enough to get any grade less than an A- in my opinion.
ReplyDeleteIn my opinion I believe the paper should have gotten at least a B+, however, I can see where this writer may have lost points. For example, the first thing I noticed is that on his first page there wasn't even a title or a clue as to what I was reading. Perhaps he had a title page or the Portfolio is mixed up in the file, but either way he should throw his title up in the top write with a page number so people know what they are reading incase mixups do happen. However, I did think his ENGL 101 appreciation paper and Autobiography were very well written and in a very bold and scholastic voice. Not sure if he was suppossed to use more in-class english words, but I believe he established his ethos in his his autobiography. Finally, his papers followed a concise format, with little fillers, and a lot of good material.
ReplyDeleteThis was a solid paper, and while it received a grade of a B-, after looking through the B+ portfolio I think that it should have gotten a slightly better grade. Personally I felt the research paper was even more in depth than that of the B+ one. All the papers were well written, and I could possibly could missing some major mistakes that could've dropped it to a B- grade, but overall I thought it deserved better.
ReplyDeleteThis paper was well constructed and to my understanding, hit the key points that were being asked. Like above, I also think this person should have received a better grade than what was given. If I were to grade it, the writer would have recieved an A-. The paper flowed nicely and I(as the reader) understood what was being talked about. The writer also improved their final draft and put effort into making this a well written paper. Good material was present and this person deserved at least an A-.
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